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The Cutie Mark Poems
– Ponies with Amorphis

[Click here for the accompanying song]

Under the Clouds a New World



All my life I had been weak on my wings
Helpless fly, unable to hold my own
All my life I had feared falling off the clouds
Scared I fell into world below my own

Ne'er before
Had I seen the green world
Boundless beauty it offered
Under sun
I saw wonders born of earth
Miracles of nature's work

On the ground I had been once scared to see
Thrived the world full of colors, light and life
All my life I had been weak on my wings
On the ground I am not afraid to fall

On the sky
Vaults of heaven gave me
Wings to fly above the clouds
Under sun
Woodland creatures guided me
Breathe the air of living earth (the green earth…)

Through the woods tranquil
I heard fauna's songs
Gentle wind told me stories of the land
Smiling I answered, understood their words
Learned to love the life on ground
Below heaven…

Under clouds
A new world opened to me
World so rich and beautiful
Under sun
I saw wonders born of earth
Miracles of nature's work

Ne'er before
Had I seen the green world
Boundless beauty it offered
Nevermore
I would fear soaring in skies:
World below me is my friend
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LISTEN THIS SONG WITH THE POEM FOR MAXIMUM IMPACT [link]

Opening the summer deviations with this, here begins my new poetry series, The Cutie Mark Poems, retelling each tale from the episode “The Cutie Mark Chronicles” (obviously). As a soundtrack acts a collection of songs from one of my absolute favorite bands, Amorphis.

As the poems in the series are each separate pieces, I decided to play a bit and will submit them in anachronistic order that fits better the overall musical direction.

Off with a great start, the Fluttershy's poem is basically my version of “So Many Wonders”, based on Amorphis' beautiful "Her Alone". A tale of one significant happening when a young, scared flier fell from the skies to the world she’d never seen before but had definitely heard of: Earth. Not much more to say than that I love the song, like the result and Fluttershy is moe.

The Cutie Marks Poems: Ponies and Amorphis
Under the Clouds a New World (Fluttershy) you are here
A Spell Guided Her Quest (Rarity) [link]
No Place Like Home (Applejack) [link]
Follow the Trail of Rainbow Mane (Rainbow Dash) [link]
Awakened the Spark of Magic (Twilight Sparkle) [link]
Learning to Smile (Pinkie Pie) [link]


My Little Pony (c) :iconhasbroplz:
"Her Alone" (c) Amorphis, from the album "Silent Waters". Written by Esa Holopainen
Song is used as a soundtrack for the lyrical content in terms of tribute, homage, parody and ponies.
Thumbnail is "So Many Wonders" [link] by :iconkillryde:

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My MLP poetry, My Little Poems, can be found here [link]
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civgod666 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Professional Interface Designer
Once again you've blown my mind! You tell her story far better than she did. Her willingness to learn and her quick adaptation to the new life she will lead is clearly captured in your words, but more so is her lack of confidence. You are really good at this. Keep it up!
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Radoxeald Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconfluttersmileplz: Thank you. Always nice to have some feedback.
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Bizzul Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
This is a rather nice poem. Especially if it's only a beginning draft. It matches Fluttershy's personality well.

One thing I would ask though, did you mean to say "Helpless to fly" rather than "Helpless Fly"? Other than that, I think it was good.
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Radoxeald Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Helpless fly". It's (supposed to be) a metaphor/statement about Flutter's self-deprecating nature and a lack of self-confidence.

:iconfluttershyyayplz: Thanks for commenting.
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Dakusodo Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hold on your telling me she has wings but she can't fly??!!??!! noob
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Radoxeald Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's how the story goes :iconfluttershyshrugplz: she did learn eventually as she grew up, but as a child she had... problems with it.
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Dakusodo Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
like i said, shes a noob :iconnoobplz:
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Dakusodo Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hold on your telling me she has wings but she can't fly??!!??!! noob
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Bizzul Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
Ahh, I get it now. I just read that wrong. Cool.
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